来源:环球教育
小编:Eileen 107雅思写作得高分难,很多同学们一定要问到底高分作文长什么样子?
今天我们请来环球教育雅思天王付博老师为你走心推荐雅思写作中好的段落范例。
雅思写作评分标准的第二项CC(coherence and cohesion) 中对作文中的cohesive devices的使用是考察的。
Coherence 只要是指语义的连贯性
Cohesion 则指的是语法和词汇使用上的衔接
【提醒】cohesion的使用其实可以说就是为了使文章的语义传递更连贯。
是不是当“首先to start with”,“也就是说that is to say”,“比如for instance” 这些表达使用的越多,文章连贯性越好呢?
当然不是,文章的连贯性一定是通过语义的连贯体现的。其实上面这些使用越多,越影响语义传递,可是不用也不行。
到底怎么办?
付宝宝的原则:不会引起读者注意,但是很自然的衔接内容和语义。
下面是付宝宝写的3个范例:
【范例-1】学生们没办法在学校集中注意力
Have you ever wondered why some students seem to fail to concentrate in class? Students require more recreational time in order to better focus on lessons in class. In fact, studies have shown that students who enjoy a recess of more than 45 minutes consistently score better on tests immediately following the recess period. Clinical analysis further suggests that physical exercise greatly improves the ability to focus on academic materials. Longer periods of recess are clearly required to allow students the best possible chances of success in their studies.
【范例-2】远程教育无法成为主流形式
Online education, conceptually what we call either remote or distance learning, has its problems. Although surveys always show students incline to getting access to materials online, the take up of purely online courses is low as a matter of fact. When questioned, students find that studying online can be a lonely and unsatisfying experience. Not only do they miss the human interaction with others, but also do not like having to wait for answers to the work that they have done. Hence, it merely becomes an alternative way to enhance students’s academic performance.
【范例-3】手机的重要性
Cell phone, though considered negative as it grabs attention from most people, now becomes the dominant mode, taking precedence over any other form of electronic communication. Besides the information it delivers, is also becomes integral to people's social relationships on a daily basis, and provides peer support in emotional matters particularly after some apps, such as Wechat and Line, become very popular. Today, smart phone with countless apps available and many others developed underway is more than a tool for communication. More preciously, it enables the user to integrate living functions.